Wiki Edit # 7: The Notebook

While reading through the first couple paragraphs in the article under the section "plot", I noticed that the author had made several grammatical errors. First, he or she added way too many commas in places where they were not necessary. Secondly, the author's use of wording seemed awkward in some spots. Finally, the author capitalized words such as "ferris wheel" even though the word is not a proper noun. I re-wrote the first 2 plot paragraphs in order for the article to flow better. Here is what the 2 paragraphs looked like before I edited the page:

Set in a modern day nursing home, an elderly man named Noah, but called "Duke" (James Garner), begins to read a love story from his notebook, to an elderly woman named Allie, who suffers from Alzheimer's, and who is also really his wife. Before, when the illness had not yet intensified, Allie wrote her love story that she shared with Noah in a notebook, gave it to him, and asked that he read it to her, promising that she will remember when he does.
The year then goes back to 1940, at a carnival. Noah (Ryan Gosling), a country boy who is with his friend Fin (Kevin Connolly), first sees Allie (Rachel McAdams), a seventeen-year-old girl from a wealthy family, who is with her friend Sara (Heather Wahlquist). Noah is immediately smitten with Allie, and continuously asks her out on dates, only to be playfully rejected by her, even hanging off the Ferris Wheel showing that he will let go if she didn’t accept. Soon, they wind up with each other while going to a late night show with Fin and Sara. They both spend extra time with each other that night, and quickly fall in love.

You can see what the article looks like with the adjustments I made by following this link